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    dots Submission Name: The Art of Getting Bydots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Art of Getting Bydots
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    I work the make-line and clean house
    scrub that shit until my knuckles bleed
    crack the skin like we scar the earth
    sharpen steel through razor-tooth
    words weave throughout endlessly
    verses form and verses fade away
    Most escape the nets lay in wait
    pen in breast pocket, eager for the peace
    relentlessly
    created
    setting words to script in harmony
    setting pace to flow and forming essence
    letting myself expand to natural sureness
    don't force it
    smiling as the composition coalesces before me
    effortless finding and following a rhythm




    Submitted on 2013-11-05 20:57:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think,

    I still love your style. The way it flows then breaks at important parts, for emphasis, I imagine.

    Like we scar the earth,

    Probably my favorite line.

    Bravado. Wouldn't change a thing.
    | Posted on 2013-11-05 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      You posted this one twice?????
    | Posted on 2013-11-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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