Empty Apartment

Author: SweetAndOhSoME ASL Info:    17/f/Here Elite Ratio:    8 - 300 /112 /77 Words: 82

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Empty Apartment

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Silent in this chilly room Bundled up in memories, and a jacket, Black like my mood. Too quiet here Alone in my self made tomb, Emptiness stretching out like centuries. Stomp another cigarette butt As I sit and brood, Thinking interaction might be the cure. In reality, I understand that this lonely Is of my own desire. Surrounded by people, This emptiness wouldn't mend. Friend, in name only, Give me a passionate night before I retire, Alone again and feeble.

Submitted on 2013-11-06 03:38:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow for someone who say poetry isn't a strong suit of yours you did a nice job here. I could feel the words on the page, full of a lot of emotion! Flowed nicely not too long not too short. Very nice thank you for posting Jackz

| Posted on 2014-01-03 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

This is very nice and it shows that you not only do grasp What poetry is all about but have also begun developing The skills that enable a poet to express the concrete and abstract as a As a unique and unified whole.

| Posted on 2013-12-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

I like the title empty apartment. It's to the point and the title is the poem. As I read this I could see you sitting in that room, brooding, I felt like I was in the room watching the poem play out. I like the part "alone in my self made tomb" it says a lot about the specifics of how you feel and how you want to feel. It's like stating to the reader that you are not here in this chilly room by chance or fate. You decided to be here, to be that person and yet you realize that you might want more. "Thinking interaction might be the cure" is another one of my fav phrases. and I like "give me a passionate night before I retire" and I feel like this is more of a plea to the gods, to the universe, to whoever is watching and you turn from being in control and making the decision to be in that room, in that empty apartment alone to someone who desires to make a connection, to meet people, to feel something new but who refuses to admit it, and only admits it in the dark and chilly room. Thanks for a good read. It goes well the weather I'm having today... It's pouring out..

| Posted on 2013-11-06 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]

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