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    dots Submission Name: Stage Frightdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 605
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    dotsStage Frightdots
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    Step into a room full of people
    Start
    Shaking, shaking, shaking

    Feel their gaze
    They're
    Waiting, waiting, waiting

    Take a stand in front of them
    Knees
    Quaking, quaking, quaking

    Tell them what they need to hear
    Voice
    Breaking, breaking, breaking

    Try to stand proud, and tall
    Room's
    Swaying, swaying, swaying

    Almost done, the closings near
    Keep
    Going, going, going

    Step down, take a seat
    They're
    Cheering, cheering, cheering




    Submitted on 2013-11-09 21:17:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this. You stuck firm to the form. You communicated a very personal, but very relate-able experience, and you kept it flowing nicely all the way to the finish. Please keep up the writes... I enjoy them, and I'm combing the new posts daily now, and will commit to commenting as many as I can.
    | Posted on 2013-11-10 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. you did a really good job. I especially like the twist at the end.

    Awesome!
    | Posted on 2013-11-09 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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