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    Author: ALonesomeGuy
    Elite Ratio:    0.88 - 1/5/12
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMonsterdots
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    Should i take offense,
    When he pushes me around,
    And everyone is laughing,
    As his friends they gather 'round?

    Everyday they do this,
    On the weekend too,
    Inside the anger's building,
    I didn't know what to do.

    So yesterday i fought him,
    Yesterday it's true,
    I cracked his skull wide open,
    And broke his jaw bone too.

    His friends, they fled in terror,
    When they first had seen the blood,
    Gushing from their friends young face,
    And mixing with the mud.

    And so I went back home,
    A smile upon my face,
    My bruised and battered body,
    Trophies from that boys disgrace.




    Submitted on 2013-11-09 23:12:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn.. That's really all that comes to mind as far as topic of the poem is concerned. As a victim of bullying I can relate to wanting to do something similar, though never carrying it out.
    It flows beautifully from one verse to the next, the rhythme is on point.
    The only suggestion is maybe taking the word "they" out, so it reads "As his friends gather 'round" or put a comma "As his friends, they gather 'round"
    Entirely up to you. And a good write regaurdless.
    | Posted on 2013-11-10 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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