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    dots Submission Name: Cold Sweat and Cuddle Weatherdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 537
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    dotsCold Sweat and Cuddle Weatherdots
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    She swells with compassion for the broken
    tokes with me while we're both joking
    on couches and cuddled closely
    watching reruns and always hoping
    for something to sweep us up

    held hands cupped and caressing
    blessing her with traces
    begging for her skin to crawl
    and calm her cool vibration
    tepid to the sensation
    cutting the air cold
    she stiffens
    says it tickles
    pulls away
    popping my balloon
    spilling my emotions
    over these blankets
    like a sea of disregard

    Feeling tossed aside
    while covers ride up our chests
    tides tucked under chin like tongue in cheek
    still weak legged and weak willed without her
    by my side

    There is an old adage about time
    healing all wounds naturally
    but that's backwards
    mentality building band-aids
    over brutality, scars, and sappy rhymes
    all hell to hear and learn
    but the truth and freely offered
    for forgiveness
    God please mend these faults of mine
    too late is no excuse
    love is infinite
    and her soul is bound to time
    and the rest of us with it

    I would marry her
    and cherish every second spent
    every moment bent and broken
    by her silence




    Submitted on 2013-11-10 03:34:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awwww so cute!
    | Posted on 2013-11-11 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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