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    dots Submission Name: Collectivedots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCollectivedots
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    My hands on your skin make me feel
    the same way that I feel when I
    walk in the door after not having
    been home for months.

    Your body is not a time machine,
    because that is a stupid metaphor but
    you always take me back to the moments
    that I have felt most loved.

    Touching you is more powerful than
    any church revival because you move me in ways that the Holy Spirit never could, and I feel you in the fibers of my being.

    We are no longer two separate things,
    and that terrifies me because I have never known someone to touch me,
    and not leave a scar behind.





    Submitted on 2013-11-10 23:19:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Love and fear are timeless and quite human. Nice one here. I wonder how "fiber" would do instead of "fibers"? or lose the "two" as unnecessary to convey the feeling... OK I'm just jealous. ;)

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      love the honesty and sincerity of the wordplay. great job on this.
    | Posted on 2013-11-11 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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