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    dots Submission Name: Making Memoriesdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMaking Memoriesdots
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    Laying in my arms, asleep.
    I kiss your little head.
    Count, all ten, little fingers
    And lay you down, to bed.

    I listen to your breathing
    The soft whoosh out and in
    Thinking of the coming days
    On my face, grows a grin.

    My tiny little boy
    Will, one day, be a man
    And I'll think back to this moment
    The day it all began.




    Submitted on 2013-11-11 14:46:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww, this is sweet. Like reminiscing the future reminiscing. It's very nicely and easily written, gives it a very homey feeling.
    | Posted on 2013-11-15 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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