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    dots Submission Name: Help Never Comesdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.44 - 5/114/129
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    There is a boy,
    Cowering in the dark.
    Afraid of the world before him.
    He has been there for awhile now,
    Ever since his incident.
    Where he lost everything,
    Right down to his heart.
    It's now shredded and scattered,
    Across the entire Earth.
    All he does is hide there,
    In the darkness.
    Hoping someone will put the pieces back together,
    And give him his heart back.
    His soul.
    His very name.
    And the worst part is..
    He knows it'll never happen.
    He knows he is waiting for help.
    Unfortunately for him.
    Help never comes,
    Not for lost souls in the darkness.
    Not for shadows of their former self.
    Not for him..




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