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    dots Submission Name: Sashimi Cigarettedots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSashimi Cigarettedots
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    Mid-morning soup
    Underwater sushi gloop
    Tin cup filled with sand
    Questionable motives found by the cleaning man

    Foreign-filled culture shock
    Time bomb ticking clock
    Bedhead morning chase
    California's saving face

    Crackin' wild jokes
    Eighteen, I've been puffin' smokes
    Through a diary of mad thoughts
    Laughin' 'cause now I'm caught





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      This sounds really personal. Like only you really know the references. Which is cool I can dig that. I enjoy reading your work, the mixture of personality and thought process and I would suppose somewhat of a timeline or process of events makes for an abstract work or works that I quite like.
    | Posted on 2015-07-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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