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    dots Submission Name: Liquor & Tree (something)dots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    dotsLiquor & Tree (something)dots
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    Possessive noun,
    Oh so beautiful
    Cherry blossom
    Straight down the bottle
    Hypocritical
    Fact of (young adult) life
    Connect the dots
    Play Twister on the spot
    Losin' my shoe
    On the game of chance
    Hot damn french fry
    This is quite the wild rant




    Submitted on 2013-11-14 02:26:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed this. I'm not sure why, as even after three reads it doesn't make much sense, but I find it lyrically simple and amusing, yet there are subtle undertones of some kind that I can't quite figure out.
    | Posted on 2013-11-18 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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