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The Lion

Author: Thetwoletters
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Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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The Lion

I see no changes
I see no blessings
I see the world changing
I see people with no evil
I see a do no harm presence
I see the love of life
The consideration
For ourselves and our planet
I see people around a fire
Love, Joy and music
Nothing but laughter
Nothing but clear hearts
I see memorable experiences
The light dreaded blond hair
The lion
The three singing bowls
Helping my spiritual journey
Helping me understand
Helping us share the little
That turned into eternity
Today i am in love with nature
In love with a clear mind
In love with my self and others
And most importantly
In love with God
Today i stand by all humanity
Around a camp fire and three singing bowls
Drums and fullfilment

Submitted on 2013-11-14 14:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This appeals to my prurient instincts so well. The fecundities of its social contiguities. The ominous wisdoms of the feral lion and his mane. The comfort this analogy imparts. My favorite line "Helping us share the little That turned into eternity". Well constructed and intriguingly appealing. A definite fave. Though I could have done without "In love with God" perhaps 'in love with the probities of demagoguery'. Then again I guess for some people it is God who is responsible for making them aware of probity. They feel, as do I, that there's a little bit of god-ness in us all. I however feel my desire to be good grows out of an understanding of the felicities of its fidelity. Ictus rubato to you. I love this piece.

| Posted on 2013-11-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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