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    dots Submission Name: The Liondots
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    Author: Thetwoletters
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsThe Liondots
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    I see no changes
    I see no blessings
    I see the world changing
    I see people with no evil
    I see a do no harm presence
    I see the love of life
    The consideration
    For ourselves and our planet
    I see people around a fire
    Love, Joy and music
    Nothing but laughter
    Nothing but clear hearts
    I see memorable experiences
    The light dreaded blond hair
    The lion
    The three singing bowls
    Helping my spiritual journey
    Helping me understand
    Helping us share the little
    That turned into eternity
    Today i am in love with nature
    In love with a clear mind
    In love with my self and others
    And most importantly
    In love with God
    Today i stand by all humanity
    Around a camp fire and three singing bowls
    Drums and fullfilment




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      This appeals to my prurient instincts so well. The fecundities of its social contiguities. The ominous wisdoms of the feral lion and his mane. The comfort this analogy imparts. My favorite line "Helping us share the little That turned into eternity". Well constructed and intriguingly appealing. A definite fave. Though I could have done without "In love with God" perhaps 'in love with the probities of demagoguery'. Then again I guess for some people it is God who is responsible for making them aware of probity. They feel, as do I, that there's a little bit of god-ness in us all. I however feel my desire to be good grows out of an understanding of the felicities of its fidelity. Ictus rubato to you. I love this piece.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-11-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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