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    dots Submission Name: Headaches and Heartbreaksdots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHeadaches and Heartbreaksdots
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    It's funny how your heart
    makes the same sound as your head
    when you're in mid-migraine.

    In those quiet moments
    when you can't even hear yourself think
    because you don't want to ruin it
    but your body refuses to listen.

    So there it goes again-
    stop reading and listen.

    Thump-thump.
    Thump-thump.
    Thump-thump.

    Was that your heart, or your brain?
    They sound the same
    if you're having a migraine.

    Maybe that's why it hurts
    falling out of love.
    You get that little migraine in your chest
    and you just want to tear it out
    and eat it
    or burn it

    or stomp all over it because it's on fire and it's not good enough and you're not good enough and I'm not good enough and no one's good enough

    But then when it's all quiet
    even if you're not sad
    and you're not angry
    and you're not heartbroken

    still-

    Thump-thump.
    Thump-thump.
    Thump-thump.

    So maybe that little migraine
    in your chest
    is something else entirely
    and it's just driving me crazy.




    Submitted on 2013-11-15 07:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like that you hit the nail on the head for anyone who has experienced either of these things, I like that you make a connection to the physical condition and the perceived condition.

    Nice.
    | Posted on 2013-11-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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