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    dots Submission Name: Forever Lonelydots
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    Author: Uzair
    Elite Ratio:    0.7 - 0/1/8
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsForever Lonelydots
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    If I can't see your eyes
    then whats the point of seeing
    and whats the point of believing in Love.

    I cry sometimes
    but not because of the pain
    its just because I'm unwanted,
    the thrill is starting to fade.

    I tried to commit suicide a few times
    it didn't work,
    too interested in walking through mazes,
    with deception and hurt.

    Valleys starts to wither
    I haven't seen sun in months,
    lack of warmness, I shiver,
    Its like hell with a cold punch.

    But as I end the journey
    at the peak of a mountain,  
    a voice screams, shouting
    I wake up from a dream.

    But there I see a woman
    smiling beside me
    holograms, images Tricks, lies
    she disappears forever lonely.




    Submitted on 2013-11-15 11:35:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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