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    dots Submission Name: Freedots

    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Don't pretend
    To understand
    I know you don't
    Because no one can
    The pain I feel
    It's so unreal
    Like dying internally
    My own personal Hell
    I have died
    Many times
    Yet I am here
    Writing these "rhymes"
    I have injured
    Even killed
    In my other form
    The only one that is real
    The animal I become
    The release from life
    It's electrifying
    To leave it all behind
    Run alone
    Under the light of the moon
    Feel the mud
    Beneath my paws
    Running faster now
    Than I ever thought I could
    My escape
    From that Hell
    Buried deep inside myself
    Farther than anyone
    Has ever dared to see
    Farther than I would ever go
    And I go there
    Just so I can be

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      I agree, having an identity is a vast myriad of reflexive awareness and when you apply the notion of freedom to it it becomes somewhat heinous since no one has the right yet even conversation is somewhat disruptive to our cognizant state. By me you should be allowed to be in it died and shouldn't have to feel that you want to be on it died. Unfortunately immunity is epicurean absurdity, the best we can hope for is alluvium aloof impunity. You should look up impunity, in it's something to be strived for even if perhaps unattainable.


    PS: the alluvial fan at the mouth of a river is mostly made out of alluvium. I realize at this point there's a lot to be said for residual harmonic vibrations but of we rise above.

    | Posted on 2013-11-16 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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