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    dots Submission Name: One and Onlydots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/132
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOne and Onlydots
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    When i see you,
    My legs get weak.
    When i hear your voice,
    My body gets chills.
    When i feel your touch,
    My body is paralyzed.
    Your love,
    Is my weakness.
    Meanwhile,
    My heart is your toy.
    To play with,
    To bend and twist,
    To tear and break.
    And yet i keep coming back.
    Coming back for more.
    Why?
    Why do i torture myself?
    Well you are..
    My one and only love forever..
    You can tell me over and over,
    Give up,
    It'll never happen,
    But I wont listen.
    I can't...
    I don't break promises.
    Period.




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