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    dots Submission Name: Witherdots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    My Mother, bless her heart
    cherishes the yellow tape
    tapering her happiness and
    selling her to her seclusion
    short of her prime
    relegating her to herself
    and signing the papers condemning
    her to asylum within these worn walls
    so she can choke on her mind
    to mend it?

    But I will lash out at that concept
    let wrath wreak madness on a crooked system
    too busy sweeping mourning souls
    wounded men and minds under rugs
    and serving them cold to tongues
    that might savor insight gleaned
    through an open mind
    and some
    some might love
    and most will hate
    as hatred is as easily
    made to quake throughout my shortcomings

    if some can take from it
    and craft new thought in wake of it
    isn't that a rigid reason
    a weighted value in a system of exchanges
    even if freely shared and
    at first take abrasive
    in it's blunt fashion
    fashioned for impact
    then cursed by inaction

    One day there will be a story
    told louder in place of it.

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