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    dots Submission Name: Pillow of Feardots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I wrote and submitted this years ago, but thought someone might want to read it who hasn't.. A true poem about my pillow of fear..


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    dotsPillow of Feardots
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    Pillow of Fear
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    Just a kid growing up,
    house, white picket fence,
    neighbors all about.

    No one hears,
    the cries and screams
    then muted sounds of a
    battered mother's
    pain?

    Someone does,
    from under a pillow
    muffled sounds
    of a child weeping
    and afraid.

    Wanting to help,
    to make it stop.
    Frozen in time,
    not wanting to hear,
    my dear Mother's tears.

    I lay under my pillow
    of fear.




    Submitted on 2013-11-18 01:28:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unfortunately, more than a few people can probably relate to this. The feeling of near complete helplessness is portrayed pretty clearly, the imagery an almost frightful shot that lands a bit too close to home. A sad piece, but a very good piece. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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