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    dots Submission Name: Invisible Mandots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsInvisible Mandots
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    I'm the invisible man
    the power's in my hands
    to not be seen
    stay out of sight
    hidden behind an endless night.

    The invisible man you may soon see
    is fighting a war with destiny
    they yell and scream
    but no one hears
    this silent war is beyond the years.

    The invisible man sits in his chair
    surrounded by the lonely air
    he's got no one
    he's near his end
    'cause destiny refuses to bend.

    The invisible man and destiny
    can't get along, they can't agree
    she hurt him bad
    and now he's confused
    wondering if all this time, he's been used.

    So now we see the invisible man
    destiny's mad because he ran
    she's got no right
    no claim on him
    he's no longer subject to her whim.

    Now this man and I are one
    our freedom now has just begun
    destiny can't have us
    we'll fight this war
    since loving her is such a chore.




    Submitted on 2013-11-18 20:44:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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