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    dots Submission Name: The Riddledots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Riddledots
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    Two lights dance on hollow graves
    a box, a trinket, wooden staves
    a hammer blow, a bloody fist
    now how has it come down to this?

    You cleave my pyrite heart in two
    the box is left without a clue
    the lights decide it's time to die
    the bloody fist raises to the sky.

    I spy a riddle, long and thick
    the answer may be kind of sick
    inside the trinket, a memory
    can't you tell we'll never see?




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