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    dots Submission Name: The Art of Strategydots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Art of Strategydots
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    A simple board of sixty four
    two armies in a row.
    They march and die without a "why"
    in the name of a King that can't speak.
    Or maybe
    in the name of a god that can.

    Unnecessary waste and sacrifice
    are only different if you
    capitalize
    on the opportunity.
    Win at any cost,
    a kill is a kill is a kill.

    It's scary how much some people
    are just like game pieces.

    It's even scarier how good some people are

    at chess.




    Submitted on 2013-11-19 01:52:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one really makes your mind tick and wonder , hmmmm
    its complex yet simple , meaningful yet empty .
    thick but yet bare.

    4/5 mate

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    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I see what you are saying here. I agree that it a shame that there are those in this existence that allow themselves to be used for the unclean motivations of others. However I do feel that there is a need to fight in ones own mind and I do feel there are calls in this lifetime to fight. It is unclear in this piece if the intention was to reveal that "Art of Strategy" in itself or if you are in disagreement with fighting at all. I guess I am looking for a balanced voice here.

    I agree with Zisky. There is something missing. If you are to draw out a point of view this way I want to see more in exploration. I want to hear an opposing view, I want to understand more clearly what you are trying to say.

    As is this piece just seems to say, I don't have control of any opponent and there are people out there starting wars and I don't understand them I am just scare of their intentions.

    I guess because the nature of the text seems sarcastic, I am feeling it is an attack on something you can't even put your finger on, that is without elaboration on the target.

    That being said, you have a beautiful voice for poetry, imagery is strong, you have chosen words here that carry a lot of connotation and I very much like the impact of spirit here.
    | Posted on 2013-11-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the underlying philosophical implications here however I feel that there is much left unsaid. "It's scary how..." How is it scary? Am I drawing the connection that you intend? At first glance, I interpret you are saying that some people are like game pieces, slaves to the whim of a player. And others are players, manipulating everyone and everything to their purpose. I think this is a powerful image that could do with being explored further, is all. Nothing wrong with this really just that it left me feeling like there should be more.
    | Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by ziska | [ Reply to This ]


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