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    dots Submission Name: Realitydots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 443
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 866



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       I know it isn't gonna flow correctly unless you say it the way i said it in my head so i'm sorry about that.


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    dotsRealitydots
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    Why can't you all see,
    The pain inside me.
    I tried to warn them,
    About the rope from that limb.
    Now my body is gone,
    My life went on for too long.
    It's because you all try,
    To live the best lives.
    And yet now that i'm gone,
    That's when you did wrong.
    But in reality,
    I gave the warning.
    Even then you ignored me,
    You still say you're sorry.
    But now it's to late,
    There is no es-cape.
    Cause now the angels sing,
    The song of my suffer-ing.
    And now the sad thing,
    You could've stopped my pain.
    Instead you looked away,
    And thats when it was ok.
    To finally end my life,
    Even though i tried a thousand times.
    It's only now you see,
    My true reality.




    Submitted on 2013-11-20 20:12:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, I mean I put my two cents worth in but you didn't respond. I relate you've got a pain inside but you don't seem to relate the pain it causes me you feel that way about it. Suicide isn't a realistic out, it's a cop out. Stand up to it, be a survivor!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-11-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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