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    dots Submission Name: Baby Riodots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
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    dotsBaby Riodots
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    I'm hurting inside
    Feels like I'm falling apart
    When Rio passed on
    It shattered my heart
    The pain is too real
    It's hard to believe
    That he went so quick
    It's getting harder to breathe
    As I lay here crying
    My lungs forcing out air
    Why did it have to happen
    It just wasn't fair
    Racing thoughts fly
    Inside my crowded head
    Feels like it's all my fault
    That my baby is dead
    His little green cheeks
    And his soft fluffy feathers
    His cuddly nature
    Made me feel so much better
    But he's no longer here
    He's dead and he's gone
    Seems like there's no way
    That I will ever move on
    The memories are happy
    Like when he clung to my shirt
    But even though they're nice
    My broken heart still hurts
    So I lay here crying
    Wanting him back so bad
    Asking God why it happened
    Was I really that bad
    Did I make his life better
    Or did I make it worse
    Was his death a blessing
    Or just another curse
    There's no bird at all
    That could take his place
    The scar in my heart
    Can never be erased
    He was just a baby
    Not even one year old
    And I took his little life
    Making my heart grow cold
    When he rang his purple bell
    It was really annoying
    And his wooden ladder
    He started destroying
    The little chirp he made
    While hopping to his bowl
    To drop his food in his water
    Was his ultimate goal
    He would dirty that water
    But it made his food soft
    And that's how he liked it
    So I'd shrug my impatience off
    That cute little baby
    Was a happy birdy boy
    Though he liked me much better
    Than all of his toys
    He'd cuddle up close
    And snuggle under my neck
    My head was on my pillow
    Just laid down for a sec
    Without any intention
    I fell quickly asleep
    And when I woke up
    I didn't hear a peep
    I got up and looked back
    And saw his lifeless eyes
    It took a few minutes
    Before I started to cry
    I sobbed and I grieved
    My heart filled with sadness
    Then I was angry at me
    My head filled with madness
    A little life was lost
    Because of my mistake
    But it'll never happen again
    That's a promise I'll make
    I never meant to hurt him
    That's the important part
    I couldn't hurt him on purpose
    I don't have that in my heart
    My nature is loving
    Caring, gentle and kind
    There's no desire to kill
    In any part of my mind
    The saddest thing is
    That I just won't let this go
    Which makes it even harder
    And the hurt continues to grow
    But eventually I will
    Let it go and move on
    I'll accept the harsh fact
    That my baby bird is gone
    He'll always be alive
    Because he lives in me
    No longer in a cage
    Now he's finally free
    I named him Rio
    Because I love that name
    No other bird of mine
    Will be called the same
    He was one of a kind
    Just so special and sweet
    And when I get to heaven
    Maybe again we'll meet
    It happened for a reason
    Though it hurts very bad
    It was God's will not mine
    But it still makes me sad
    Please forgive me Rio
    And God please forgive me too
    Not any other bird
    Will make me stop loving you
    After writing this poem
    I feel so much peace
    It's like a weight of my shoulders
    A huge burden relieved
    I know that it's God
    Who heals my broken heart
    It has always been Him
    From the very start
    So next time baby Rio
    Consumes my crowded mind
    I will seek my Lord Jesus
    In Him, comfort I'll always find




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