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    dots Submission Name: The Unexpecteddots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Unexpecteddots
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    Under the sky of forbidden time
    Where your shy eyes caught mine
    How could we have ever known
    That the conversations to come
    would make us fall in love
    So very deeply in love

    Affection felt in every color
    Our beating hearts for each other
    Little time to connect
    No reason to reject
    Broken hearts collide, new
    Love is the only truth

    Distance lies in unity
    A divide so guilty
    For the reason is futile
    Though the glass is so fragile
    But the solid armor, strong
    Separated right from wrong

    In a castle all alone
    Welcoming just one to the throne
    One not to take over
    But instead become a lover
    One crowned on the inside
    Living only to abide

    Every misery faded
    And the cold steel jaded
    Crimson thoughts linger still
    Though the voids were filled
    How can a blazing sun cry
    Shining bright in the sky

    Colors bleed within
    Letting the safe in
    A rainbow of new sights
    Never seen in dark broken nights
    The old fading away
    All new welcomed to stay

    The walls still stand
    But the key is in your hand
    To open the golden gate
    Which leads to a place
    A castle made for just two
    For only me and you




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