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    dots Submission Name: The Sevendots

    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Sevendots

    I'm followed by the shadows
    of my failure
    and my inability
    to let go.

    These living memories
    haunting me
    I refuse my own cries
    for help.
    I'm drowning
    watching them fall and fade away

    knowing I can't
    have anything.
    Help anyone.

    God only knows
    It's not for lack of trying.
    I'm killing myself
    bending over backwards
    trying to change
    to fix this mess.

    And I hate them all
    almost as much as I hate
    but even then I try to convince myself
    I'm not a monster
    even though we all know that's a lie.

    So I hope the first is happy
    and I hope she remembers what we did
    and I hope it burns her inside
    that she lives with that guilt for the rest of her

    And I hope the second is content
    and I hope that maybe one day, she'll see me
    and think, "If only, if only."

    And I want the third to know
    that I'm sorry
    I wish he could see I was there
    that I wasn't too late.
    I failed him, and my only wish-
    his forgiveness-
    is withheld eternally.

    And I want the fourth and fifth to burn
    they deserve no better
    even if I'm between them
    I want to see the flames.
    In a perfect world
    I'd light the match.

    The sixth might one day live in peace
    if I could just bring myself to leave her alone
    but how can I
    when she's one of the only ones
    who can make me feel anything, anymore?

    All I have to say about the seventh is
    I wish I'd never even laid eyes on her.

    These seven sins mark my failure and disgrace
    the personification of the ruination
    of my life.

    Submitted on 2013-11-25 17:48:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure what to think of this. I'd need an explanation. There seems to be a lot of anger and hurt in this. What I get is these are relationships that have either ended in huge failure on their part, or what you think to be a huge failure on your part.
    | Posted on 2013-12-02 00:00:00 | by TeslaKoyal | [ Reply to This ]

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