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    dots Submission Name: Imperfect Rhymedots

    Author: Zai
    ASL Info:    24/m/US
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 66/145/98
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       First draft. I really like the idea behind it. I'm not sure about the stand alone hall of mirrors line, though.

    I think I'm going to fiddle with this some more, see what else I can come up with, another day. What should I expand on? Am I missing a piece? Should I give more personal descriptors (like physically/passions/ etc)?

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    dotsImperfect Rhymedots

    I am unique, just kept in perspective.
    The things I do have been done before.
    I've made things from a hundred years ago.
    My entire life is the sum of an imperfect rhyme,
    perfectly placed off to the side.
    This very line has been written before,
    read before, sung before,
    far before even my first breath was born.
    I am nothing but another image in a hall of mirrors.
    Far be it for me to claim ungodly uniqueness,
    I'm merely trying to see with the clearest senses.

    Judge me by my pretenses.
    Force me to grow.
    Starve me of water.
    Shorten Life's sentence.
    I will cross a line,
    imperfect rhyme,
    just kept in perspective.
    There is nothing I am that another is not.
    But no one alive has the combination I've unlocked.

    Submitted on 2013-11-26 01:04:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. A lot. In fact, I'm favoriting it as soon as I finish this comment. It's really something I think about a lot, how we never really do anything completely new and original- just re-do all the old stuff in new and original ways. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-12-04 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]
      Once asked how much of a short story of mine I had written I responded, "all of it of course!". ;)
    | Posted on 2013-11-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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