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    dots Submission Name: Safe and Sounddots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 5/118/134
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    With each breath i take,
    Each move i make.
    Every time i hear your voice,
    I realize i have no choice.
    But too keep on dying,
    Even though i know how hard you're trying.
    My heart can't be fixed,
    Especially not with your tricks.
    On that night it was burned,
    On that night when you turned.
    Now all i want is a chance,
    To finally give you that one dance.
    But i know now i never will,
    Even though to do so..I'd kill.
    Everyone in the universe if i had to,
    Would die just so i could be with you.
    And with each step,
    Hope i can no say i kept,
    Cause now i am just to sore,
    And with just a little more,
    I will die on the ground,
    But finally.. I'll be safe and sound...




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