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    dots Submission Name: I Quitdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsI Quitdots
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    I quit..
    Trying to be happy,
    It just sets up for sadness..
    I quit..
    Trying to make life better,
    It will always get worse..
    I quit..
    Trying to win,
    I'm fighting a battle i've already lost..
    I quit..
    Trying to being the best person i can be,
    Nobody will ever see me for who i really am..
    But most of all..
    I quit trying to live...
    Death just sounds so much sweeter..




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    ||| Comments |||
      You seem to confuse the issue of reality constantly, by believing in these false dichotomies; the light creates the shadows. Darkness isn't its own entity, simply the absence of light, the way cold is simply the absence of heat energy. You can't have bad times without the good, and you wouldn't know what a good time was if you hadn't gone through the bad. Life isn't two sides of a coin, it's the infinite sides of a circle twisted to reflect back on itself, intersecting at every possible point. It's not black and white, there's so much more to it than that- no wonder your outlook is so bleak. Focus more on the color than the pain; the colors are better anyway. Keep writing, and thanks for sharing as always!
    | Posted on 2013-11-28 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]
      NO.
    | Posted on 2013-11-28 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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