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    dots Submission Name: My Fatherdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 528
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    Description:
       change of heart


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    dotsMy Fatherdots
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    you died for me
    many years ago
    you planned for me
    to go down this road
    you know my future
    you know my past
    you see through my lies
    you see through my mask
    you see me
    for what I really am
    a liar and a sinner
    a worldly woman
    Lord help me to change
    the way only you can
    you know whats best
    for me in this life
    so lead me down the path
    the narrow path of light
    lead me to you
    and your kingdom in the sky
    I want to be ready
    for you when I die...




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