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    dots Submission Name: To A Christian Frienddots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 954
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 853



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       Not by me...No idea who it was by because they put anonymous


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    dotsTo A Christian Frienddots
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    When the cold winds blow,
    Will you offer me a warm place to go?
    He said you would.
    When my tears flow free in the pain of grief,
    Will you weep with me?
    He said you would.
    When I'm in despair from the burden's load,
    Will you stop to share?
    He said you would.
    In the joyful days when my spirit sings,
    Will you join in praise?
    He said you would.
    Will you be my friend,
    Will you walk with me
    Unil the journey's end?
    He said you would.

    Jesus said, a new commandment I give unto you,
    That you love one another, as I have loved you,
    That ye also love one another.
    By this shall all men know that ye are my disciples,
    If ye have love one to another.
    John 13: 34 & 35




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      This is a grt piece the first two lines were perfect though it wasnt orginally yours,you would have still edited it,and made it longer
    and follow a definite form


    When the cold winds blow,
    Will you offer me a warm place to go?
    He said you would.
    When my tears flow free in the pain of grief,
    Will you bring me that long sought relief?
    He said you would.
    When I'm in despair from the burden's load,
    Will you help me shoulder some of the load
    He said you would.
    | Posted on 2013-12-12 00:00:00 | by LAMENTATIONS | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. I love this. The poem works within the scripture. We need more poems like this, in my opinion.
    | Posted on 2013-12-02 00:00:00 | by TeslaKoyal | [ Reply to This ]


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