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    dots Submission Name: Vanishing Actdots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsVanishing Actdots
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    Your ontological inertia remains
    mindbogglingly irregular.
    Generally, when something exists
    it has a tendency to keep...
    Existing.

    But you seem to disregard that completely
    vanishing as you like
    confusing my object permanence
    like a trans-physical game of
    peek-a-boo.

    Yet the convenience of your
    disappearance
    leads to the incoherence
    of my moral persistence

    and people treat me like a psycho.
    Just because I don't feel quite like you do
    doesn't make me crazy.
    It just means I don't care.

    That's just what happens
    when my conscience goes away.




    Submitted on 2013-11-28 22:51:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      how artful is your defense. Keep calling em how you see them
    | Posted on 2013-11-30 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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