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    dots Submission Name: Agonydots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAgonydots
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    Another pain
    deep wound
    dagger rupturing
    trusting back
    eviscerating
    all emotion kindled
    kindness proven
    false and fabricated
    designed
    bleed me dry
    drain every honest smile
    hollow in the end
    Wide grins still
    Sinister,
    she talks big
    stalks small game
    turns cold and deaf
    leaving me suffering
    the silence
    lie to my face
    of broken promises
    break hearts on birthdays
    Should've never
    sought the benefit
    of doubt
    Still comical, watch me
    I'll flail about this hell
    suffocating the vacuum
    empty and low
    with space

    Every time
    should resign she's lost
    all love for me
    at least forgotten
    somewhere
    along the way
    I have to quiet
    rage a voice and a violence
    redirected at myself for losing
    The only thing worth keeping
    and I don't know
    If I was blind
    if my mind
    was too busy
    building suffering to
    savor every second
    I should've
    savored every second that I could
    but
    I know it wasn't enough for you
    I should've held you up
    and loved you
    down to your barest
    and I did
    but
    I know it wasn't enough for you anyway
    Because today you're gone
    and I savored
    every memory soured
    soul devouring itself still
    and you're silent




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