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    dots Submission Name: A day in the lifedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA day in the lifedots
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    I borrowed today to pay the bankers
    leased myself twice with guilt
    fleeced myself with interest
    just to keep this casket colorful
    doubled over with debt

    bought two burgers
    value menu vices
    bare cupboards beckon not
    call me a hypocrite
    I'm caught in this

    I'm lost to this
    maddening retribution
    dissolving solutions
    before my wary eyes

    Why is life so fickle
    quick to make little
    the only meaning in my world

    Sorely mistaking
    cold hearts for caring
    her bold flirts for sharing
    friendships in this void
    but she was wicked
    with that trust
    tarnished love
    sickening

    This is a cage
    my head is an animal
    screaming agonies
    blood quickening
    walls thickening
    between myself
    and anything that matters




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