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    dots Submission Name: Tonightdots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Not great but i needed to portray this and i couldn't the rhythm down sorry i will imporve

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    Tonight is judgement night,
    When i finally take action,
    When i finally do something about my life,
    I have waited for so long,
    And now action must be taken,
    For i have been a part of this war for to long,
    The fight must be won or lost,
    It all has too end,
    For if it doesn't...
    Everything i have done,
    Everything i have been through,
    Everything that i've been through..
    Will be for nothing,
    Every promise would be broken,
    Every scar would be shown,
    All of my hate would break through..
    So this is it..
    Judgment Night,
    Cause tonight is the night..

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