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    dots Submission Name: Sleepless Nightsdots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 90/220/226
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSleepless Nightsdots
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    My muse is off somewhere on a runaway train
    Seeing sights and hearing sounds that surely
    Will be pressure washed against my brain
    In the wee hours of the night when sleep
    Just doesn’t come.

    She took off her hat and underneath
    A bird majestically flew by.
    Songs were sang and chattering teeth
    Mumbled soft words against the cold.
    I toss and turn still,
    And the lit up numbers keep ticking away.

    A broadway show that turns dark,
    When the actors do a spin and then
    Suddenly all miss their mark.
    Instead a blackness comes,
    And they all disappear.
    A few more moments have wasted away.

    Deep in the jungle a song starts to play
    And the animals are in a strange position,
    They begin to bob and sway
    While the sky sets afire in sunset.
    The images are hazy now,
    My eyes begin to close.

    The images are quiet now,
    I know I’ll write them down.
    The animals all take a bow
    And the sun is beginning to rise.




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      The factuality of all that to me in insomnia daydreams.

    Bruce

    PS: ethology entelechy, explicate zoomorphic zoolatry
    | Posted on 2013-11-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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