Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Your Somebodydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/65/84
    Words: 383
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 500
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2166



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYour Somebodydots
    -------------------------------------------


    She saw him standing there
    Talking about something she didn't understand
    Still she listened because she cared
    He seemed different
    And somehow she felt comfort in his pain

    One day he told her he couldn't lie
    He sat down with her
    Expecting her to leave him behind
    But little did he know how loving she was
    And to this day she stands by his side

    How can he leave when he loves somebody
    Why would he stay if he didn't care
    Where would she turn if she had nobody
    Well she doesn't have to worry because she knows
    That he'll never walk away

    He wanted her to stay
    And that's exactly what she did
    She's here now and will be forever
    No pain can keep her from him
    She will never leave, no she will never leave him

    He took trash that never existed
    And gave her a reason to wait
    The way he treats her with patience and love
    What more could she ask
    Of this man who won't leave her behind

    How can he leave when he loves somebody
    Why would he stay if he didn't care
    Where would she turn if she had nobody
    Well she doesn't have to worry because she knows
    That he'll never walk away

    He protects her in more than one way
    Her love grows for him never ending
    When things only seem to be getting worse
    She's blown away at the things he has to say
    He tells her he loves her but she can't understand how much

    She wants him to know how she sees him
    When she looks in his eyes it is real
    The passion and love between them
    Will never subside or fade away
    They only have forever to be together

    I'm not gonna leave cause I have somebody
    I'm always gonna stay cause I'll always care
    You can turn to me cause I'm your somebody
    Deryl, you don't have to worry
    Because you are my reason to stay




    Submitted on 2013-12-02 21:31:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow thanks for sharing. A positive note, love never assumes the worst, love is the most faithful principle.
    congratulation's on taking it seriously no matter what.

    I don't have much to say on the structure or anything its a solid piece and I enjoyed it,

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-12-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198346

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry