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    dots Submission Name: Timelinedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 550
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1192



    Description:
       Not so sure about this one yet. Very very rough. Like some of the metaphors. Need to return to this with a different mindset.


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    dotsTimelinedots
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    I was young
    brilliant and alive
    screaming from rooftops
    resilient and regarding the world
    an oyster in a half shell
    swelling like the tide
    carrying it forward

    I was old
    bold with my confidence
    tied to the monuments of life
    looking back with envy
    told to find some solace
    in the strife of this disorder

    I was older
    tip-toeing across
    twice burned bridges
    brighter with each broken promise
    lighter with each quiet night
    alone and heavy with my thoughts

    I was caught
    each moment fleeting
    every word pleading to be heard
    lips dry and wrinkled dark
    stark against the lighthouse
    sea creeping towards my shore

    I was sure
    she was the one and only
    that love was truth and holy
    like a spirit and the soul
    object of my affection always
    careful with her compassion


    I was stuck
    witness to her beauty
    blossoming
    in spite of me
    each petal protesting
    the way we were always drifting
    on





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