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Author: ponykeeper
ASL Info:    55/f/Canada
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Embedded in the polished face
of a moon-blind eye opened wide,
an ideology of place;

of everything which lies outside
the heart, once lids have been pried
fully apart; of mirrored core

where love reflects as so much more
than an optical collusion.

Submitted on 2013-12-05 14:51:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yes indeed. Reflections can sure be funny things. Very often they are not what they seem. Well written again.

| Posted on 2014-09-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

They say that love conquers all and I definitely have a tendency to want to believe. I imagine alien civilizations that have achieved the transcendental accession to ascension. That they might even have been able to continue to exist without corporeal physicality (not that they totally outgrew their propensity for it). The thought of such spirits wandering the cosmos, being creative, having fun. We must be such a disappointment in so many ways. A mirrored core I that!

| Posted on 2014-09-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
Oh this is exquisite. Sensual and spiritual. Lovely

There is no more that needs be said..beautifully done.

| Posted on 2014-05-23 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is like two people having sex
With the goal of racing to orgasm
Just to get it over with. The point gets made
Conception occurred. But personally I would
Have felt less used if there had been a bit of foreplay
| Posted on 2013-12-20 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
  the focal point of this delusion
is 44 words from its conclusion...

Just some thoughts drawn from your thoughts.
| Posted on 2013-12-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Chris, I haven't read anything of yours in awhile. I like, about this, that it's kind of shiny and neat, which maybe goes a fair way toward disguising what rests below the surface. I think your word choices work double hard, effectively to offer a sense of something slick and/or pleasing in appearance that turns out to but less than so. Really like the parting shot 'optical collusion' as it brings it all home. Nice work.
| Posted on 2013-12-06 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]

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