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    dots Submission Name: This Shelterdots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThis Shelterdots
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    A more what sun pierced its way through?
    Holes Along this terrible shelter
    Who as it stood kept off wide world
    From breaching me I sat colourless and dry

    Yet tame and happy to be annulled
    From the marriage of grief
    Only ever suspended above me
    This shelter is shutting out leaves now

    Harmless things that dangle and patter
    For all these years I only remember reading
    Open plains of rain and light;

    It may take this certain death to prove
    An endless, immaterial spirit moved
    Through the thinking speakers here.

    I know, if at all, we can prove this last transition




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