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    dots Submission Name: Yellow Birddots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Would you like to be Yellow Bird. Or would you rather be free?


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    dotsYellow Birddots
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    When Yellow Bird sings;
    Her song has wings.
    The song flies far from her cage.
    She gets some seed for her wage.

    Yellow bird is very pretty,
    Preening on her perch all day
    Now and then as she sings,
    Her keeper's cares take wings.

    Yellow Bird's keeper keeps her for her song.
    If Yellow Bird knew her prison is her song,
    Would Yellow Bird yet sing for seed?
    Or would Yellow Bird want to be freed?

    Her keeper leaves Yellow Bird's cage open.
    But Yellow Bird does not leave her home.
    She is safe and warm and comfortable there.
    Why fly away to anywhere?




    Submitted on 2013-12-08 16:34:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i sense there is a hidden meaning here but your not making yourself quite clear ,
    i feel this can become something more ,
    3/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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