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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.44 - 5/114/129
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    So that's it,
    I caused this path of destruction you are on.
    I designed the road and put down the pavement.
    I am the one,
    That lead you to this road of sadness.
    That sent you on an impossible search for happiness.
    All i did was lie,
    Lie to destroy one of my only friends.
    Lie to eliminate the darker half of me.
    Now you pay,
    You pay the price of me being a coward.
    You pay the price of me wanting better for myself.
    Now you are dying,
    Dying a slow and agonizing death.
    Dying a death that i am to blame for.
    All i can say now my comrade.
    Don't forgive me.
    Don't trust me.
    But listen when i say..
    I am sorry.




    Submitted on 2013-12-08 21:57:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am sorry for whatever happened to cause this despair. Some of your "I"s are lower case. Maybe you meant that. I dunno. The flow is halting but you do get the emotions across.
    | Posted on 2013-12-10 00:00:00 | by Magickirene | [ Reply to This ]


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