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    dots Submission Name: _WOULD YOU?dots

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    dots_WOULD YOU?dots

    Would you bring breakfast to Bed?..
    Feed me love with a kiss on my Head?..

    Would you bring me smile on a crummy Day?
    Be a rainbow of colour when the world turns Gray?

    Would you be my green in times of Drought?..
    Fill up my being and hurt me Not.

    Would you lay my worried head on your Legs?
    Keep me warm;As the hen to her Eggs..?

    Would you pat my hair in strokes of Ease...?
    Subtle kisses give not Cease?

    Would you see through my weakness make me Strong?..
    Lay upon my chest tell when the heartbeats are Wrong?..

    Would you lay down with me on thorny Roses?
    Lay so close we would rub our Noses

    Body locked in arms upon flowers upon Roses..
    Would you be with me like this as each day Closes?...

    Thicker than blood;Would you value me more than Life?..
    Would you be my lord in times of Strife?..

    Would you walk me to Heaven through the roads of Hell?..
    Give the push pass points where most men Fell..

    Would you for me take arrows and Darts...?
    Pull me together when i fall Apart?

    would you stay when poverty and hardship Come..?
    Stand with me through the raging Storm?

    When I cry would you dry my well of Tears..
    Bring me Laughter through the runing Years..

    Would you be the mother of my Kids...
    Walk with me through life's road not caring where it Leads..

    Would you be my Man at the Aisle?
    Showers of kisses on me you Pile?

    In the end,between us let there be no End..
    Even at Death,would you weep as a lover and a Friend..

    A Poem By
    © Rachel Ige and Egharevba Terrific Terry

    Submitted on 2013-12-12 01:31:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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