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    dots Submission Name: Remindersdots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    an emptiness. perhaps it's a realisation to want the holy.
    to feel the holy. as if this conundrum can exist and i can be mercurial
    in my hope, my dreams, my fire, my passion to be; oh, just to be
    and forget. that there is anger in my words to you and to that other you
    transposed to forgiveness, transmuted to light and the thought
    i should know what it means to destroy this hollowness.

    i miss you.



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    Lamentations for the weary, this is my home

    Right now, this aching need
    to be at once quiet and joyful, the essence of the colour of dance
    and shadow, the breathlessness of a sunset between lovers
    who meet once a month to bind themselves to each other

    Like birds over a dustbath, like birds who roost on my roof, oblivious
    to time and how I always wake up at 5 a.m., never getting out of bed
    until 6, always tired, always an inch away from sleeping in

    Or sleeping forever, however many times we both dream of this
    this is not full circle, green and sometimes grey, blue and sometimes
    amber trapped in a necklace you should be wearing, to
    remind you

    That everything needs a reminder to forget.


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      And this mind moves
    at light speed foolishly
    fondling every "what if"
    trying to find the comfortable "was"
    | Posted on 2013-12-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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