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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    He stands there.
    Searching for it.
    The chance he deserves.
    The shot to win.
    You can see it in his eyes.
    He wants one chance for victory.
    To prove he is the one.
    The true chosen one.
    That his counterpart is an impostor.
    Nothing more than that.
    Someone deceiving others.
    But the man stands there.
    Knowing he can't have his one shot.
    So he hides his eyes.
    Those eyes that glow with darkness.
    Hungry for redemption.
    Begging for victory.
    He hides them underneath his hood.
    Nobody shall see.
    The dark underneath.




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