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    dots Submission Name: Creeping Crawlingdots

    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCreeping Crawlingdots

    I creep into the bathtub
    Where I can be alone
    I creep into the bathtub
    So my anger won't be shown
    I can feel my heart race
    While I'm laying down
    I can feel my heart race
    While trying not to frown
    Listening to music
    So I can be calm
    Listening to music
    Before I cut my palm
    Crying from the pain
    I punch the bathroom wall
    Crying from the pain
    On my knees I fall
    I crawl on my hands
    To my destination
    I crawl on my hands
    As I find the irritation
    I find my way to the mirror
    Where I look at myself
    I find my way to the mirror
    And I grab the razor off the shelf
    I ask myself a question
    Then I start to cry
    I ask myself a question
    But I'd rather die
    I creep into a corner
    Where I can never see
    I creep into a corner
    Where no one can see me

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