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    dots Submission Name: The Love Of My Life Is A...dots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/65/84
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The love of my life is a Christian
    How Do I let him know
    The love of my life is a Christian
    All the love I want to show
    The love of my life is a Christian
    In my heart he lays
    The love of my life is a Christian
    Forever and always
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I care about him lots
    The love of my life is a Christian
    He's always in my thoughts
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I want to be in his arms
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I want him to keep me from harm
    The love of my life is a Christian
    He makes me laugh and smile
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I'd kiss him for a while
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I want to be with him forever
    The love of my life is a Christian
    I will leave him, never




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    ||| Comments |||
      to me this makes no sense at all , except that u repeat words
    lack of word flow and word play , i believe you can do alot better

    as for expression , that is noted
    but put more feeling into that and stop repeating your self
    clearly people know u love a christian from the first time u said it , lol

    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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