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    dots Submission Name: The Death Of My Heartdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Death Of My Heartdots
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    Darkness has a hold of me
    My demons still scratching inside
    A fatal light appears just at the end of the tunnel
    As I realize the blood loss is taking its toll
    I reach for the razor one last time
    Then I cut my chest again
    So that the blood seeps out slowly
    Then I cry with tears of pain
    Not from the wounds on my skin
    But for the wounds in my heart
    It aches with sadness and loneliness
    It fiends for tender love and care
    It screams of powerful hatred
    And it dies for the one whom I most dearly love




    Submitted on 2013-12-14 01:12:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lack of word play seems kinda empty , really depressing . sad.
    :( 3.5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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