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    dots Submission Name: You Left Me, She'll Leave Youdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou Left Me, She'll Leave Youdots
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    The wind blows softly as I call your name
    I stand there in the cold pouring rain
    Listening to nothing as I start to cry
    Watching every raindrop go on by
    Trying not to cry while I'm waiting for you
    You not being here makes me very blue
    How can I live without your kindness
    I don't want to live with anything less
    Still waiting for you as hours pass
    The next tear drop stings just like the last
    I'm growing tired very sleepy now
    I think to myself "how could you do this, how?"
    You left me out in the cold without love
    No stars in the sky, no not one above
    I can't believe you could just leave me there
    With soaking wet clothes and soaking wet hair
    Why did you do this who do you think you are
    Our relationship didn't get very far
    I can't believe you'd do this to me
    It hurts so damn bad can't you see
    You left me for her that stupid bitch
    Don't crawl back to me you'll end up in a ditch
    Now I stand here with tears in my eyes
    And I hope she leaves you and you'll want to die




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      yhea i didnt feel this one , Meh 3.5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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