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    dots Submission Name: Razors, Knives, Screw Drivers, Glassdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRazors, Knives, Screw Drivers, Glassdots
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    Razors, knives, screw drivers, glass
    All things I can cut myself with
    All alone talking to myself
    No this is definitely not a myth

    Razors, knives, screw drivers, glass
    Things I pay most attention to
    Yes I'd rather cut myself
    Than spend time with any of you

    Razors, knives, screw drivers, glass
    Things I want the most it's true you see
    I don't understand why
    They can't just leave me be

    Razors, knives, screw drivers, glass
    Things I so do adore
    Thanks to that uncle of mine
    Who made me feel like a dirty whore




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      this one is morbid , but i like it alot
    this time the repeating doesnt set it off
    but its doesnt help it ither still a slight pause in the flow

    4/5
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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