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    dots Submission Name: A Life So Sweetdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Life So Sweetdots
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    Staring out the window
    I see the last bit of light
    As the sun goes down
    Standing on my toes
    To see the beautiful stars
    I grasp the last bit of hope I have
    And wish upon a star
    I wish for a life so sweet
    So strong and fun
    So caring and loving
    I wish for a life so sweet
    A life of dignity
    A life of promises
    I wish for a life so sweet
    Oh how i wish for a life so sweet




    Submitted on 2013-12-14 01:48:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i got where your going with this but i neeed more feeling to it !
    still feels like you ment to add more and left out the juicy details

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    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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