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    dots Submission Name: I Don'tdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Don'tdots
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    As I scream inside
    My eyes shut tight
    I hold onto my faith
    I must keep fighting
    I must not give in
    I blast my music
    I hear the words
    That somewhat calm me
    But then the urge
    Becomes too strong
    I fight my way away from it
    But it's too late
    It's in my hand
    A scratch
    A cut
    A slash
    "NO!" I've done it once again
    I scream at myself
    I don't want to do it anymore
    I don't...




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      word play please , to much use of I ,
    | Posted on 2013-12-18 00:00:00 | by kyserin | [ Reply to This ]


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